HI expert,yesterday i asked a question about ASL and you said me to perform this on my own.I tried and this is my speech.check it tell the correctnessand also give me a 1 minute inroductiom

Ladies and gentlemen, today I am here to share with you my views on organ donation, in the hope that you will take them on board and give someone the ultimate gift after you have left this earth the gift of life.

Ladies and gentlemen, at this moment in the US there are 79,000 U.S patients on the transplant waiting list. Three thousand a month are added to this total. Not a lot you may say when the population is close to three hundred million, but now add twenty to thirty family and friends to each patient, and the number increases vastly.

Every day between 16 and 17 people die whilst waiting for a transplant. Again you may say not a lot but in the average mans lifetime the death toll is 1,980,160 almost two million people. Ladies and gentlemen you can help. By donating your vital organs after you have passed away you can save lives.

For the more sentimental of you, of the 79,000 patients waiting for a transplant, over 10 per cent of these are children under 18 years of age.

So, how can you help? All you have to do is get in touch with your local doctor and he will tell you all you need to know. You fill out one form, and receive a card; it really is that easy. Then, once you have passed away in many years to come, your organs will be removed and will give somebody else the chance of life.

After a transplant of a vital organ, the average survival rate is over 80%. A massive increase from the 20% that would live without the surgery.

Some people worry. Will they be left open after the surgery as they are already dead, or will they still be able to have an open casket funeral? The answers to these are simple. You will be treated with the up most respect in the surgery and the same procedures apply to the body as a living body. And yes, you will be able to have an open casket funeral if you wish to.

Ladies and gentlemen the gift of life is the most amazing gift anybody can give. How I see things, and what made me become a donor, is that after I am gone I will have no use for my organs. So why should I deprive someone else from using them.

Please consider what I have said today. Thank you.

Good attempt Hitesh. There are a few things you should pay attention to:

-"For the more sentimental of you'' and "after I am gone"  (too informal for a speech, try to rephrase)
-"once you have passed away" (it does not need to be mentioned so many times)
-In formal writing, try not to use first person pronouns, instead use he/she.

Keep practising to improve your writing skill. All the best!


 

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