Is This article fine for the topic ' Are the poor in India free from fear even after independence ?'

Dear Student,
Here are some changes which are required:
1. For me-> According to me/ In my opinion 
2. They lack financial support from the government. Although we see... (Break the sentence into two parts, as otherwise, this would be a run-off sentence)
3. in our hearts-> in our society
4. status of "human" back-> "equal humans"
Some suggestions:
1. There are a lot of run-off sentences in your article. 
2. Keep the sentences short for the reader to enjoy your article. 
Hope this helps!

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