Is this paragraph okay for this question, "lord of the flies meiagar aapnayak ki jagah hote to aapkyakarte?" .Now my answer is,"Agar mei nayak ralph ki jagah hoti to meisabtoektapurvak karya karneki salahdeti. Meiralph ki tarah hi ssabhi ko eksath rahaneke liye kahati. meiunheyeh ahsaas dilati kialag-alagkaam karnese kisi kokuch prapt nahi hogabalti sab kuchkharabho jaiga. parantu agar hum sabeksat milkar karyakhusi-kushi ke saat-saatshantipurvak karenge to hum essankat se bina kisipareshanike bahar aasakte hai." plz tell me what can i add more in this and how can i make it more attractive and effective. plz tell it fast