Please check this notice writing.

YOU ARE GAUTAM,THE CULTURAL SECRETARY OF DAV PUBLIC SCHOOL,MIDNAPORE.WRITE A NOTICE TO INVITE STUDENTS TO PERFORM RABINDRA JAYANTI.
DAV PUBLIC SCHOOL, MIDNAPORE

NOTICE

INVITING STUDENT'S TO PERFORM
RABINDRA JAYANTI
10 March, 2017
It is hereby informed that there is a cultural programme in the occasion of Rabindra Jayanti on 8 May, 2017 from 5 pm to 7 pm in our school auditorium. The programme includes drama, songs, dance, poetry etc. Interested students to give their names to the undersigned by 7 April, 2017.
                Make it a great success.

Gautan
Cultural Secretary
 

Dear Student,
Given below are some of the mistakes in your work.
  • In the topic, add 'on' between perform and Rabindra Jayanti. (perform on Rabindra)
  • programme on the occassion
  • The programmes include
  • dance and poetry recitation.
  • Interested students ought to
  • by 7th April
  • Avoid 'make it a great success'
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YES,ITS ALMOST CORRECT. THERE IS A SMALL MISTAKE THAT IN NOTICE WRITING WE NEVER USE PRONOUNS SUCH AS HE,SHE,WE AND OUR. INSTEAD OF OUR  'THE' IS USED.
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