Sir/mam and my dear friends as I have posted this question before also, and asked the changes due to the help of my sweet friends and respected experts now I am able to understand this and I have made the necessary changes.
And I am thinking now that it is perfect for my examination point, and I will be gaining the full marks in this .
Once I need yours help in this, will u tell me the following errors.
- Grammatical mistakes.
- Tense mistakes.
- And any other mistake regarding the format of this.
- Please tell
- Thank for your king help.
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Dear student,
Kindly edit your writing accordingly and you can visit our website to know the appropriate format for your piece. I hope the explanation is of some help to you.
- They act (tense- since the entire text is in past tense, it should have been applied here as well) as a tourist guides (a and guides cannot come together according to the rule of singular and plural) ; The correct sentence should be : They acted as tourist guides (no comma should be put) and .....
- ...etc necessary things (other necessary things).
- ...complain(complained- past tense).
- ...hard and tough(both the words here deliver the same meaning hence, you could use just one out of the two).
- ...destitute life due to the fact that the war had engulfed their home and family, the boys...(war conditions isn't appropriate here).
- Thus, this shows they were extremely patient and tolerant.(appropriate way of conveying your thoughts).
- The love, faith, trust, enthusiasm, devoted personality and sacrificing attitude that the boys possessed is really...(omit held with them).
- Thus (used twice in the same paragraph, Use: Therefore, it can be said that or Hence, it is appropriate to say that their sense of sacrifice...).
- ...off all nobility and we can still look forward to the presence or existence of magnanimity and generosity.(add 'we' between and / can ; instead of 'revival of' use the word existence/presence because revival means renewal of something whereas existence means that the values are already present and their presence can be felt around you in this age).